Revise the paper | English homework help

Revise my paper.

Blue checks on my paper are what my professor did, and those little blue checkes are what I need to fix. 

I attached 2 files ( Plato, Malcolm X) which I wrote based on.


please revise my paper according to the files that I attached.

Also I will attached the rewrite key so that you can fix my paper with the rewrite key.


1. Thesis

2. Grammer


those two are the most important part on my paper.

Also, please add or remove if you have any ideas. 

Thank you,